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Wrap your hands,
Around my neck,

Force me,
Down to my knees,

Mush my mouth,
Against concrete.

Tell me that you love me,
Pretty-Please.

Push me,
Make me fall.

Bruise me as I bawl,
Just love me.

Hurt me,
Endanger me.

Tie me up,
Throw me down.

Just hurt me,
'Till;

I can't breathe.
I'm weird.....I know. W/e though<3
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Winx-Cute-Girls Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
we 're both weird.....
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:iconeyeofhavoc:
EyeOfHavoc Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Embrace it:heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
May I say, I love your usage of bold/italics. As I read it, italics come out as a cry, a whisper, a whimper, etc. while bolded phrases are commands, or rise in desperation. It really creates an interesting effect, especially with the play of normal font that makes sure the lines keep that emphasis. (Because if it was all italic/bold, it wouldn’t really stand out or make a difference, you know?) And then the climax of the poem: “I can’t breathe” with both font types? Nice planning there.
Anyways, this is a great display of those masochistic-esque emotions that involve love & lust. The contradictions are painfully understandable—relatable, on one level or another, for most of us. The interesting thing about this poem is that it can really be interpreted differently. When taken literally, this is a rather dark poem with some self-abusive themes. However, with that said, the rawness of the emotion is almost alarming, and I can't help but take this as something inward...physical pain manifested from an emotion.
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:iconeyeofhavoc:
EyeOfHavoc Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Thank you:heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I only wrote what I thought. :3
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:iconeyeofhavoc:
EyeOfHavoc Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you<3
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is great!
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:iconeyeofhavoc:
EyeOfHavoc Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you<3
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
im weird too<3 :) I like this one!
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:iconeyeofhavoc:
EyeOfHavoc Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, thank you:heart:
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